Writing Commons Five: Cinquain

Thursday, May 01, 2008

Flaming
Silently
Above my hair
A verdant candle
To eat the lightsome air
Before I feel the snuffing

At 1:15 PM, Hillary said...: Brittney,
I really like your cinquain. You have a beautiful poetic style and you use interesting diction. I have one question, however. Is the first line, "Flaming," your title? Thanks for giving me a good example to look at when I write mine!
At 2:04 AM, Brittney said...: Yes, "Flaming" is the title: the assigment says that an "-ing" verb should be used as the title.
At 9:13 PM, Briana said...: I like this. It manages to be both clear and obscure at the same time. Also, I don't see any errors in terms of the format, so I think you're probably solid.