Monday, May 19, 2008

One Last Change

Flaming
Silently
Above my hair
A verdant candle
To eat the heavy (used to be lightsome) air
Before I feel the snuffing

I am changing the word "lightsome" to "heavy" because "lightsome" is the exact opposite of what I meant the air to be like. I only discovered this once I printed it out and read it aloud.

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